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Nowadays, it is more and more common to study abroad, which is not only simple on the surface but also has a lot of challenges. I believe that studying abroad has more disadvantages than advantages, which are listed below.
Firstly, the cost of studying abroad is higher than that at home. If the family's financial condition is not good enough, it's hard for them to afford the cost. Secondly, most people need to live alone after going abroad. As we know, there are dormitories in domestic universities, but none in foreign countries. Young people need to rent a house outside school alone. How lonely and insecure! Thirdly, they have to suffer spiritual loneliness. Different environments and cultures make people miss their hometown. A case in point is Chinatown. It's a sign of homesickness.
It goes without saying that studying abroad is expensive and it is very difficult to overcome the differences arisen from living alone and the cultural environment. In conclusion, studying abroad is full of challenges, but I still wish all international students can finish their studies smoothly.
有几点需要指出，第一段你用了difficulty和advantage做对比，不恰当，你面临的困难多于带给你的好处。你认为出国留学的弊大于利，第二段三条都在写弊，但是应该适当的描述出国留学的好处。第二段里你说外国大学没有宿舍，也比较片面。我在法国一年，有专门的大学城，就像留学生公寓一样。申请美国大学的时候，住宿也有选项，可以选择学校公寓或者租房。第三点，Chinatown跟留学的劣势没有任何联系。如果所在的城市有唐人街，那对于留学生而言是一件好事。最后一段，第一句是goes without saying，第二句是there is no doubt.两者意思一样，直接用and连接多好。最后一句你希望所有留学生顺利毕业，跟你反对出国留学相矛盾。所以，前面加点东西。
